DON'T HAVE A TITLE! I remember when I looked in your eyes I knew it was true My heart never lies I was in love with you You stood there Just looking around My whole body melted Right into the ground I remember the day I remember the time I remember the place It's always on my mind You looked so good In your shirt and jeans I remember the night You were in my dreams I wish I could be with you Day after day Because I love you More than words could ever say!! *~SARAH~*
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this is an excellent poem sarah its very touching when u first told me it i was like ~*~Awwwwwwwwww~*~ its really very sweet ;) *hugs* ♥-ÅnğэĹ-♥ aka ~*~Nikki~*~:p
Sweet just Sweet.. Your caring and loving none poem writing Mod STORMY
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Y'all This poem was written for My b/f ADAM and I (L) him very much!! Newayz I hope Yall like it!
it was lovely.......untill the second verse :| .. when u said you melted into the ground..... how did you manage to finish the poem after that? :-P
Well Jingle_Balls well its just a figure of speech, but if you liked it im glad if didn't...o well!! *~SARAH~*~AKA~*~♥Ñõ☼1`Ś☼Ćĥĩķ♥~*
really cool guy, I'm glad you liked my poem!!........Thank You Everyone for replying!! *~SARAH~*~AKA~*~♥Ñõ☼1`Ś☼Ćĥĩķ♥~*
yea sure......I'll name it after a perfect stranger...lol!! :p *~SARAH*~*♥Ñõ☼1`Ś☼Ćĥĩķ♥~*
aawwww that was reely sweet but when u melted into the ground was like just...lol....the poem was awsome!!:P
It was good tell me what you think of this And when he gets to heaven, To Saint Peter he will tell, Another soldier reporting sir, I've served my time in hell. Well, what ya think Rainin Kia
Lol Rainin. Nice poem...it could touch hearts...but for love? (j/k) It was wonderful to take the time to share a good happiness there should be in Tanx..unfortunantly, there are still chances for war. I do not know why, but thanks for reminding us for peace! Pohatu Nuva['_']
you asked: tepid, artless, tripe (time/mind ,dreams/jeans)??? read some Emily Dickenson and... burn this poem.
he cant help that he has to make everything joyful turn to a whole bunch of nothing.........It may not be work of art but atleast i tried!! :|
I would apologize if it was due.
You asked for opinions.....if it were otherwise I would have gladly opined otherwise.
My opinion stands..... Rainin relax, it wasn't personal.... (don't know the kid)but it's obvious you and the other "critics" here wouldnt know a good verse if it were turned in your keyhole.
Here's another poem about longing
the west wind brought her
but not to me
her presence a prairie fire
I am swept over and left
desolate charred and blackened
then, with a clarity that rivals
even the desert night
she seeks not vain affectations
the straight path strewn with bright blooms
my gifts to her where only this
I knew no other
no east wind blows her back to me,no
she is gone
I lie as death and wait
the rains will come
feel free to dismiss it hate it love it etc. its out there and THAT is all that matters about ART
Rate this ,it looks as if she did a lot of damage with that wind... tell her to lay off the baked beans
lol...perfect!!.....I didnt write it, so I dont know her ...but Ill let ya know if an ill wind blows this way.......